Jo Kelen SST6 poem (sorry its a day late – let me know what you think!)

21 Dec

Duck

A duck’s in Ruskin Park, a park in Camberwell,
She swims in the pond, and looks happy as can be
The duck’s face is always calm, staring bleakly at the dell,
Though beneath the surface she paddles frantically

A chimp oddly enough, was walking through the park,
Yes, London’s full of chimps, on that please take my word,
In full suit, with a brief case, he looked incredibly smart
Singing a little song to himself, till suddenly he heard

A most beautiful sound, a sort of ‘quack quack quack’
He beats his cheast, taps his feet, mouth spreads wide with glee
Nostrils flair, tummy rumbles lips go smack smack smack
Longing to meet the face of his dear sweet heart to be

And so following his ears, over he then goes
As soon as she glances over, she cannot avert her eyes
His long arms, his eyebrow, and his short button nose
His square jaw line, his torso, his broad muscular thighs

She said: quack quack, he said ou ou
He said ou ou ou? She said quack quack quack
And so it continued under the light of a full moon
They fell in love with each other, as easy as that

Till chimp said ‘This was fun but I’m leaving the pond
Got a job in the rainforest, are you ok?’
The duck stared back blankly, couldn’t quite respond,
Just watched him then his shadow then his space walk away

A duck’s in Ruskin Park, it’s a park in Camberwell,
She swims in the pond, and looks happy as can be
Her face is always calm, staring bleakly at the dell,
Though beneath the surface she paddles frantically

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2 Responses to “Jo Kelen SST6 poem (sorry its a day late – let me know what you think!)”

  1. mouthypoets January 2, 2014 at 1:46 pm #

    I love this lots of surreal humor in there but also of a lot heart and depth .neal

  2. Anne holloway January 2, 2014 at 3:24 pm #

    As ever, funny, a hint of something deeper- but – the thing is, you are a clever lady and I’d really like to see if you can refine this, so the metre runs smoothly, it’s a bit jerky in places- I’d like you to play around with the rhyme scheme too, try some internal rhymes, surprise us, trick us into thinking you’re going to rhyme one way, then flip and do something different.
    It has a real Owl and the Pussycat’ feel to it. And I know when you perform this it will have us howling.

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