Liaurie RAMSEY second draft

19 Jun

My pulse quickens as I stand before the doors.
Am I ready?
Can I face the versions of me left behind?
How do you know when ur ready?
To face the truth of who you were who you are and will be?

A child stands before me, what future can I promise her? Where will her journey take her. Children are the promise of a future.
What will we teach them?
What fears will we install?
Will we only speak the truth
or fill their heads with fantasy and magic. Shield them from the world
we no they just come apart of?
The child before me smiles in ignorance of the difference that marks her as different
Her days are full of family gatherings and love music and food. She dances to the music of celebration.

A young girl walks beside me
She says
In this world of light and dark how do you find your way to the light?
Can you trust your own heart?
Do we choose the path we take
Or is it just part of something planned?
She doesn’t like who she is head full of taunts she believes to be true
I remember these years of my life

A young women walk slightly ahead of me. She sings a song softy
Although I can’t hear the words
the melody feels my head
And tells me
We often live our lives observing our selfs through broken mirrors
We give them power to define us
We observe these distortions as a truth
Never understanding it’s a creation of another’s mind.
We watch our lives past through fun house mirrors viewing ourselves shaped to the creators design.
A mirror starts as glass. Glass is created by sand. So with the changing tide wash away the sand destroy the mirror and creamy your own
I look through my own mirror now
And smile at the truth reflected back
I exhale and exit the house of mirrors

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One Response to “Liaurie RAMSEY second draft”

  1. MouthyPoets June 26, 2015 at 10:19 pm #

    Hi Liaurie,

    I really enjoy how you have brought in the woman that you follow and how that guides you through this literally and mental journey I feel that whole second half is really successful and insightful for me and also feels really empowering and I like that. I also am a big fan of the kind of white rabbit thing where you follow someone/something mysterious and it leads you somewhere important and for me that really works here.

    What I feel less clear on is what is happening in the beginning and who the person is, could you tell me like really literally who is this person, what are they doing, what has happened to them and why do they need to go into this room of mirrors? Why are they are child? Which part of them has been left behind and why?

    Not sure if you have seen the extra editing sessions I have got up, it would be really great to get you to one to talk through some of this because I feel a chat and some working on this together could be really helpful.

    Speak soon
    Debris

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