neal pike second draft sst11

21 May


wings   oddly   bolted

pulling this body    in   wrong   directions


tongue  wrapped up  in brambles

scratching words into irrelevance

from  a young  age

I  used   my   mouth  more than sparingly




elders  around   me said

I  used  it   too  much   it was   mainly   windless

clouds  that  took   time  to  shift  places

it took me time to shift places



I  was diffiernt with  oddly botled wings  that

Grew  more bolts as I got older

chose  to  sing  with tongues  like  mine

the  word   brave  caused  feathers  on my  wings  to recede

drop  like pellets

being  pushed  backwards

against a crowd of clouds

for  wanting to  push  forwards




because I could and wanted too

winds around me coverd my wings with the word

brave stroking  my  head  telling  me  I didn’t  have   to

do these  things  like  flying   backwards   or  singing  home written songs

I was brave for this

– – –
brave  for  not   letting   oddly  jointed  wings

fall  fall back  to   the  nest

brave for not letting my tongue nestle

against the brambles

brave for flying  to  stages

then not flying off when the crowd drapes around the edge of me

brave for not shutting a mouth that

should always be shut


One Response to “neal pike second draft sst11”

  1. MouthyPoets May 29, 2016 at 6:15 pm #

    These lines particularly knocked me sideways: ‘it was mainly windless/ clouds that took time to shift places// it took me time to shift places…’ I think the rhythm of the makes the last ring out more. I like the variation of rhythm in general in this piece, makes it feel very natural and speech-like.

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