Bridie Draft 2

30 May

Cats in Space

What is this place?
Why have we been brought here?
Pick the first letter of your first name
This letter corresponds with a word
That is your cat name
The name you would have if you were a cat
Captain Snugglemunch
Correct
Time to scroll
Movement through
Let’s go
5 ways to get fit with your feline friend
Cat yoga
5 ways to get fit
Get fit, 5 ways to, feline friend
You have a new friend request
Who on earth is…
1, 2, 3, more friend requests
Captain Snugglemunch wants to connect
Follow, follow, follow
Around the kitchen
Food porn, word porn, porn porn porn
Pulling up to planet sex scandal
Landing, landing, landing
Do you want to buy a new home?
Get furniture delivered to your door today!
LOL. NO.
Ainsley Harriott, Noot Noot, Chris – Simpsons Artist
Life hacks, grilled cheese pizza sandwich.
Article about refugees
The dog died
Dog died
The dog died. He died.
Someone left him in the middle of the field
Off the side of the motorway
People said we could never be friends but.
Fox hunting ban petition
Illegal music YouTube
RIP IT. RIP IT.
Shocking video shows gorilla holding hands with boy.
I want to go h…
I want to go h…
I want to go home
Landing page, landing page.
Profile picture, profile picture.
Warning.
Everyone looks so happy here.
10 ways to
9 ways to
8 ways to
7 ways to
6 ways to
5 ways to
The last letter of your last name
This letter corresponds with a word
That is your cat name
The name you would have if you were a cat
Captain Snugglemunch, ready for takeoff sir.

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One Response to “Bridie Draft 2”

  1. MouthyPoets June 3, 2016 at 12:58 pm #

    Hey Bridie!

    Cats in Space -YES! Now that’s a title!

    What is this place?
    Why have we been brought here?

    – I don’t super undertand this bit, but maybe I’m not supposed to? would happens to the poem if you cut these two lines out (just as an experiment?)

    Pick the first letter of your first name
    This letter corresponds with a word
    That is your cat name
    The name you would have if you were a cat
    Captain Snugglemunch
    Correct

    – Love this, and brings us straight into the internet 🙂 could you say which letter you’re first name begins with, the lead us on a bit more of a bread trail?

    Time to scroll

    -great, really captured the attention span

    Movement through
    Let’s go
    5 ways to get fit with your feline friend
    Cat yoga
    5 ways to get fit
    Get fit, 5 ways to, feline friend
    You have a new friend request
    Who on earth is…
    1, 2, 3, more friend requests
    Captain Snugglemunch wants to connect
    Follow, follow, follow
    Around the kitchen
    Food porn, word porn, porn porn porn

    – I have no notes on this bit. I love it. I almost want more here 🙂

    Pulling up to planet sex scandal

    – it took me a couple of reads to understand this meant sex scandal was a planet – maybe some capital letter would help?

    Landing, landing, landing
    Do you want to buy a new home?
    Get furniture delivered to your door today!
    LOL. NO.
    Ainsley Harriott, Noot Noot, Chris – Simpsons Artist
    Life hacks, grilled cheese pizza sandwich.
    Article about refugees
    The dog died

    I LOVE how the refugees is in between the rest, as it is with facebook, jsut hideen in a newsfeed

    Dog died
    The dog died. He died.
    Someone left him in the middle of the field
    Off the side of the motorway
    People said we could never be friends but.

    – great, slight expansion, then desitracted again. wasn’t sure why there’s a full stop at end of but?

    Fox hunting ban petition

    – this felt a little old? are there more recent examples you could use?

    Illegal music YouTube
    RIP IT. RIP IT.
    Shocking video shows gorilla holding hands with boy.

    I really like ‘rip it’, but again, i want something wuite recent?

    I want to go h…
    I want to go h…
    I want to go home

    -Brillaint. would Home have a capital, like it does on fb?

    Landing page, landing page.
    Profile picture, profile picture.
    Warning.
    Everyone looks so happy here.
    10 ways to
    9 ways to
    8 ways to
    7 ways to
    6 ways to
    5 ways to
    The last letter of your last name
    This letter corresponds with a word
    That is your cat name
    The name you would have if you were a cat
    Captain Snugglemunch, ready for takeoff sir.

    absolutely love how it comes back on itself.
    wasn’t too sure about ready for takeoff sir? feels a little last liney?

    this is a really excellent poem, and I can’t wait to see how you’re going to perform it!
    Maybe if there was one overall note for the poem, it would be that you could try just clicking on the news bit on the side of facebook everyday for the next week, and writing down the most ridiculous headlines?

    (My favourite at the moment is: Phil Jones: Photos Show Manchester United Defender With Dyed Blonde Hair … in the same feed refugees etc come up.)

    Amazing stuff Bridie, can’t wait to see it 🙂

    Chris
    Artistic Development

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